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pathetic Defeat by ~aPinchofSalt:iconaPinchofSalt:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Fixed


I want to
but you can't
love you
just let go

I want to
but you can't
force you
just give up

I like you
so I know
only too well,
I know...

I want to
but you can't
need you
be that man

I want to
but you can't
change you
lose yourself

I like you
so I won't
ask that of you
I won't...

I want to
but you can't
lose you
unlearn someone

I want to
but I can't
hold you
confine someone

I want to
               it's not my right
I want to
               though i wish it were
I want to
               sometimes it kills me
               that i'm not "her"

but I can't
                          and so...
                                               can't           you             ?
©2007-2009 ~aPinchofSalt
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Author's Comments

read it however you want to

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~MOCAMBO Nov 11, 2007, 8:52:51 PM
You....dont have to be her. Just be yourself and....it'll all be ok.
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~aPinchofSalt Nov 12, 2007, 1:40:38 PM
perhaps

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Nobody, not even the rain, has such small hands...
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~adifferentkindasoul Nov 12, 2007, 9:04:06 PM
:star::star::star::star::star-empty:

...ish ish outta 5 right?....

but seriousl-e...ur writing honestl-e...reaches/affects me more and more each time! You make ish seem s0o e-z!=)...ish a good thing:w00t:

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^-^ * =) ;) >=P
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~aPinchofSalt Nov 12, 2007, 9:07:06 PM
i love yooh! =) tanks you tila =P

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Nobody, not even the rain, has such small hands...
:iconadifferentkindasoul:
~adifferentkindasoul Nov 12, 2007, 9:13:33 PM
of course of course rhianna!....rihanna?..:D

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^-^ * =) ;) >=P
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~aPinchofSalt Nov 12, 2007, 9:14:40 PM
lmao nice. u smell =P

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Nobody, not even the rain, has such small hands...
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~Velvet-Angst Nov 26, 2007, 5:33:08 PM
You should think about using parenthesis () so to make the reading process easier. Otherwise, it's rather confusing to read sometimes.
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~aPinchofSalt Nov 30, 2007, 4:40:12 PM
thanks for the suggestion =). i kind of wanted that confusion with this written piece though, because i was confused wen i wrote it. ill take the parentheses into consideration for next time though.

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Nobody, not even the rain, has such small hands...
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